"Hey, um Brandy?"
"Yes?" she replied hesitantly.
"You know that trip to Japan that I'm going on?"
"Yeah. What about it? I'm going to know the full details for my parents in order to go. You said you could bring a friend, right?"
"Right, but I was thinking about taking Abby. I spend a lot of time with you in the summer, but I'll hardly see her with camp, youth, if I get a job, and for when she goes to Michigan. It's the only time we could have a chance to spend together."
"She has you during the school year. Breaks are my only Kreesten time. Anthony and Sean had to learn that."
"Yes, but in the school year, I still see you twice a week. I never see her on breaks."
"No. We decided a long time ago that breaks are my time and school is Abby's and everyone else's time."
"Ugh. I feel like a kid with divorced parents!"
"You ARE a kid with divorced parents."
"Oh yeah."
"Fine, but remember, I'm probably better at getting around. Does Abby know how to take care of you? Does she know your difficult eating habits? Does she know how to deal with your morning mood swings? Does she realize that you're most grumpy when you're hungry? Can she handle you after a week? Does she-"
"Hey! You can stop now! Geez. You act like I'm difficult to be with or something."
"You are."
"No I'm not! Well anyways, I'm taking Abby."
"Alright. Have fun in Japan." She said doubtfully.
You did a really good job showing each personality of the person speaking. You could tell when it was you talking by some of the comments and words you said and you could tell that there's was two different personalities. It sounded like an actual conversation that you could of had with your friend. The only thing is that you had some typos and forgot to indent, but other than that the dialogue was very believable, it was like actual conversation.
ReplyDeleteFunny how friends learn to take care of each other-- I liked the morning mood swings and grumpy when hungry. It does sound like two people who know each other well.
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